Final) Opinion Paragraph

CCTV: Protector in A Children Care Center

Subject; A Children Care Center should install CCTV in their facility.

In my opinion, a Children Care Center should install CCTV in their facility. Recently, installation obligation of CCTV is issued globally as well as Korea. In Song-do, Korea, a teacher of the Children Care Center hit a child strongly, so it had a great ripple effect. There are several reasons why facilities have to install CCTV. First, children have a limitation of expression. According to Sun-Spring Center, a psychology development center in Seoul, 3 or 4 years old children can say just 1000 of word. They cannot make a statement objectively and specifically. Second, CCTV can prevent arguments between parents and teachers. This accident made parents doubt teachers. If a facility do not install CCTV, parents consistently doubt teachers. It is important to make sure of objective evidence. Third, it is not invasion of privacy. The opposite insists CCTV violates teacher's the right to control personal information. However, we can see easily CCTV anywhere because it acts for people's safety and prevents crimes.

In shortly, installation of CCTV is unavoidable for children's safety.

References
1) Jung, M. (2015, January 22). CCTV to be required at all daycare centers.The Korea Times.
2) Language Treatment. (n.d.). Retrieved fromhttp://www.sun-spring.co.kr/
3) Keller, S. (2012). Securing the Corporate Child Care Facility. SRK.

Blog Post #5

Production and Ownership knowledge

  I used to write English essay in a note or paper at last semester, so it has been forgotten easily in my hand or head. I can't find and remember my essay. However, in this semester, I wrote my essay in my blog. It is awesome. I can read my last posting wherever, and I can revise grammar or paragraph whenever for perfect word. Also, I can take feedback from other students by commenting. The Blog posting is a very good procedure for producing knowledge because it makes me to try writing perfectly. 
 Also, this paragraph is mine. I own my last postings, and I have to take responsibility for my postings. In addition, if I want to use any outsources, I have to express that for references. In briefly, I know that any paragraphs or sentences are belong to some people or institutes, so I will attention using a outsources.

Blog Post #2

Comments

1) Comments on my blog

 I have got the 3 comments on my second Blog Draft. They read my Blog Draft interestingly and informative, but said me something what I have to correct a sentence for good paragraph. First, Hojung said me, 'Please write down more supporting sentences.' Because I used word 'various aspects', readers needs several reasons to understand. However, I did not write 'several' reasons, there is only one reason. Therefore I corrected word just 'It is clear'. Second, Sojin suggested me like 'change your writing as one paragraph without using space until the paragraph is ended.' I absolutely agree this suggestion, but I cannot take care of this problem on time. In addition, she suggested that I should use at least one reference. Third, Chaeyeon agree my paragraph. She and her friend started Instagram for only sharing of pictures. In short, I've got the 3 comments on my second Blog Draft, and they suggested me for various aspects. Their comments are very useful for me.

2) Comments on other blog

Blog Draft #1

 EW2-020 T/Th

Hi June,

I think so too. I heard that Seoul's internet system is best of world. My friends have come back from Europe travel at the last vacation, and she said, "I can't find easily free Wi-Fi zone! It was so inconvenient". I think we live in convenient city.

Have a good weekend.

Jieun.

 EW2-047 T/Th

Hello Jihye,

Incredible! I am so surprised because you have over 15 different lipsticks. You are right, I was tempted to spend money for cosmetic at any street too, but we have to get rid bad habits. Then I think Seoul makes a lot of park good for excercise, and you make the best use of that. 

Have a good weekend,

Jieun.

 EW2-047 T/Th

Hello Hyeji,

You live really wonderful environment! I will go to the Cherry Blossom Festival sometime. However, I had to search where is Suri Mountain, so I think you write that it is placed in Gunpo. Your post is very interesting and makes me envy you.

Have a good weekend,

Jieun.

Blog Draft #2

 EW2-060 T/Th

Hi Jae min,

I absolutely agree your paragraph. The night of Seoul is very convenient and beautiful. However, I want to read specific data in your paragraph. I think that you can find any data in www.kostat,go.kr. It'll be helping you. 

Have a good day,

Jieun.

 EW2-047 T/Th

Hello Jiyon,

Thank you for giving me many information in your paragraph. I really want to visit SF. I think you lived at SF, right? Your descriptions are very specific! However, I want to read specific data in your paragraph. It'll be difficult to find the data about SF, but I suggest you find it and please write it. 

Thank you for reading my comments,

Jieun.

EW2-035 W/F

Hi Chaeyeon,

I absolutely agree with your paragraph. A travel with friends has many advantages. However, I suggest you add the specific data. If you visit www.kostat.go.kr, you can find any data about your paragraph. 

Thank you for reading my comments,

Jieun.

Blog Draft #2 Recording

The New Strong of SNS

  Instagram, the popular photo sharing service, has been growing at a fastest pace among SNS(Social Network System) for young people. According to KISDI(Korean Information Society Development Institute), Instagram has grown 23 percent for two years. Also, users are mostly between 16 years old to 24 years old.

 First reason, it is clear. You can see pictures only you want. There are no advertisements on your news feed. Of course, you can see advertisement if you want and follow whom advertises clothes, restaurants, sports etc. Therefore, your news feed will be filled with pictures that you want to see.

 Second, it is accessible to anyone. In Instagram, a hash tag is activated, so you can easily find pictures that you are interested in. For example, if you want to see more 'dog' pictures, search the '#dog', '#dogstagram' or '#petstagram'. If you like the picture, just click that twice. Moreover, if you want to see the person's pictures constantly, just click the 'follow' button. Then you can see immediately person's news without their permission. 

 Third, it is specialized to put up pictures. There is a button you can post pictures right away in the first screen. Also, because there are several filters, you can direct various images. In addition, most people post pictures with short writing, so you can concentrate only pictures. Besides, Instagram encourage to cut picture into a square. The same size pictures give a stable feeling to see. 

In briefly, Instagram is good program for young people who want to see and post various pictures clearly. 

Reference 글로벌 SNS 이용 현황과 시사점, 정보통신정책연구원 방송미디어 연구원, 박병선,bspark@kisdi.re.kr

Class Presentation

This is my class review for Sep. 30th 2015. I talked about blog comments and drafts.